Smut Marathon Round 5 Results and Going Forward

This round of the Smut Marathon wrapped up as of last night, and I woke up to the results just this morning. Round 5 of the Smut marathon closed with results looking somewhat sporadic where the points were distributed. In previous rounds, the points always looked somewhat focused as the judges often voted for the same people, even if not for the same number of points. However, with points spread out all over the place, it looked like the judges were a bit divided on what worked and what didn’t. A clear winner of the round was made, but runner-ups were cutting it pretty close to each other with some point differences as small as 0.2 points.

With the voting round over, I can now share my entry with all of you. Conveniently, my entry was entry #1:

She can’t stop

How long had it been since she first straddled the custom silicone phallus? An hour, maybe two? Her bedside drawer was full of dildos, but this one was different, special even. It couldn’t replace the man it was molded from, but it was happy to try every time she missed her husband.

But something had changed.

The silicone toy saw itself in a large mirror, as well as its mistress, and saw the despair in her eyes. Despair that translated into lust for something, or someone, like itself. Over and over, it felt the squeeze and clench of her cunt as she pressed it deeper into her, and climaxed. Each time she would bear down on it, release a torrent of lascivious cum, and it would glisten again. And each time she did, the girthy toy thought it would be the last time. But every time, she would sob a bit more, lift her hips, and grind into it again.

Would she ever stop?

Her voice sounded breathy and confessed her need without words. It felt how puffy and raw her vulva had become as she slid down its shaft. It grew hot to its core from such constant use and ceaseless stroking. Then another lewd, stifled cry as it felt another tight clench. One more stream of heady juices washed over it and formed a sticky, white ring around its base.

The toy looked back into the mirror again and watched her chest heave as she recovered from yet another climax. If she didn’t stop, the toy would soon be worn down to nothing, and it might never be used again. The slightly misshapen cock saw her eyes look back at it through the mirror and saw there was something different there now. Not just despair, but a memory. A yearning for something she craved even more than a mold-made erection, but for whatever the reason, couldn’t have it.

It saw her eyes turn away, and cry out in both sorrow and lust as she started riding it again, more determined than before. Her voice moaned his name as desperation drove her to continue as if she might open her eyes, and the silicone cock would become the real one it was molded from. It would still be there in the end, still standing, still taking her, until there would be nothing left.

She really can’t stop, can she?

Story from round 4: #14 All That Remains by Exhibit A

As you may have noticed, a good majority of the entries were all based on 3-4 of the same entries from round 4. Mine was no exception. But as we couldn’t discuss our work amongst each other, no one could have predicted this would happen. Judges and the public alike had a difficult time casting their votes for so many similar stories. But they did their best, and I’d like to congratulate David Watson for getting the highest score this round.

As for the feedback, I was pleasantly surprised to get advice that was super helpful! A couple of them weren’t positive, yet were nice enough to tell me what they liked about my entry. Feedback is much more appreciated when you say what was done right, as well as what could have used some work, as it helps a writer identify both their weeknesses as well as their strengths. Take these feedback quotes from this round for example:

This was…it was hot, don’t get me wrong, but wow that was just incredibly sad. Having the toy see her emotions as it played out was a good choice, and it was definitely a more emotional than a sexual piece to me. That said, it was powerful.

and this one

 This is as heartbreakingly beautiful as the original.

As I mentioned in my last post, I sent in this entry because I found it to be more well-balanced. It was one of the more emotional pieces I’ve written in the past, and I wanted to express the same blend of grief and ecstasy as was created by Exhibit A in round 4. And clearly, half of the other writers felt the same way. For me, “All that Remains” was worth more because of it’s beauty and power, not just for how erotic it was.

Oh, right! I almost forgot to share the entry I was originally planning to use, but didn’t. Here it is:

It was once just a leg on a chair. Each day spent sliding forward and back across the stone floor. But ever since the dragon moved in, and drove out all but the Princess, it sat dormant and useless. A broken fragment of something that was once useful. But all had changed the day the beautiful Princess picked it up off the floor, with an idea in her eyes. Her knife carefully carved fragments of the wood away, removing all she deemed unneeded until only a figure of beautiful curves remained. So much time spent smoothing and polishing every inch. Never had the length of wood known such care in its craftsmanship.

The day came when Princess Lily brought the wood length to her bed, instead of her table. It felt astonished to see the Princess begin to remove her garments, and laid next to it with a look of desire.Unsure of its new purpose, all it knew was it now had a bulbous end that the Princess touched to the flesh between her thighs. The wooden shaft had known her roughened hands, but the skin it now touched was as soft as satin. It slid against a tiny nub that seemed to make her shiver, and grew hot. When the timber piece became coated in juices of arousal, it entered her vulva.

The shaft felt resistance, at first, but her arousal made it slick enough to glide inside and out with ease. The fingers of her other hand rubbed small circles around the same button from before. The wooden phallus felt the inside of her body slither and stretch all around it, and listened to the odd sounds she would cry out, moans of pleasure and ecstasy. With a final thrust, there was a clench all around it, and a heat that baptised the former chair leg into a new purpose. It watched in awe as the Princess relaxed into a primal state of joy.

After it slid out from within her, she brought it to her mouth and ran her tongue along the wooden rod, and sucked on its end. If this was to be its new raison d’etre, to bring Princess Lily satisfaction and joy, a respite from the dragon, then it would be content in this. Before long, the phallus was picked up again, and heard her gasp as it was re-inserted inside her.

Story from round 4: #26 Royal Showmanship by Samantha

Surprise surprise, right? My other entry was based on another commonly used entry this round.

But I doubt I would have fared much better in this round had I used this entry instead. A majority of my feedback all showed that I had a flaw in common. It didn’t feel as though I was writing from the sex toy’s perspective because I was writing in third-person. Had I written it in first-person, I may have done better. As you can see, my other entry was in third-person as well. I won’t list the rest of the feedback as it was pretty much unanimous that I should have written in first-person, but such a unified consesus is a refreshing change of pace.

I hardly ever write in first-person, to be fair. I prefer to act as narrator for my stories, rather than write as though it’s happening to me. But perhaps I should experiment with first-person more often.

Round 6 is underway, and I already received the assignment literally as I was reviewing the results of round 5. Though I’m a bit worried this will be my last round. I’ve been stuck in 20-21st place for half of this competition, and only 20 will advance after this round. If I don’t get some decent points with my next story, I’ll likely be one of the people knocked out next. Given the assignment (won’t say what it is) I don’t have much hope, but will try anyway.

Wish me luck!!

  2 comments for “Smut Marathon Round 5 Results and Going Forward

  1. May
    June 10, 2018 at 10:49 pm

    I wish you luck and do agree that where feedback is concerned its best when you receive a good point along with the constructive criticism 😉

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  2. June 11, 2018 at 11:22 am

    I’m pleased you found the feedback helpful this round. Mine was a bit mixed but it seems I need to be a bit more interesting with my stories. I liked your other entry option too and am glad you shared that one as well. I hope this is okay to say, but I noticed in both of these entries you wrote vulva when I think you meant vagina. The vulva is only the external area 🙂
    Aurora x

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